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catch me
i'm the girl forever falling
save me
from the glass on which i'm crawling
fuck me
i can never ever say no
kiss me
quickly before my lipstick goes
hold me
convince me i'm worth it all
kick me
just please don't laugh at me when i fall
scar me
i love watching myself bleed
love me
the one thing you can't do is what i need
©2005-2010 *forever-haunted
:iconforever-haunted:

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hmm... bit of an angsty poem but i like it. i like contructive criticism but bear in mind it's quite personal so don't be too harsh lol

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:iconcelestial-elevator:
oh wow, WHY has no one commented this piece?! I LOVE it! :+fav: You describe the mix of desperation and hope perfectly. I love the rhythm in it. AMAZING! :clap:

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And the soul outwears the breast,
And the heart must pause to breath

-George Gordon Byron

My poetry
:iconforever-haunted:
*blushes* thankyoooou!!! i love you muchly *huggles*

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deviant: procrastinator
photographer and writer, amongst other things

i gave up long ago. painted love with crimson flow. ran out of blood and hope. so i paint you no more
:iconcelestial-elevator:
lol you're welcome. I love it:)

--
And the soul outwears the breast,
And the heart must pause to breath

-George Gordon Byron

My poetry
:iconaleia:
wow that's brilliant! wish I could describe my feelings like that... anyway, I love it!! lOOOOOve it! :+fav:
:icontuishimi:
It is a little angsty :lol: but I like it anyway.

These 4 verses I like very much, and at the same time I feel saying "noooooooooo! Don't think like that!" :) So I guess it is tugging at strings.

hold me
convince me i'm worth it all
kick me
just please don't laugh at me when i fall

It's very funny but I went to my first opera yesterday and there was a whole sequence of a couple about to be married that was very much like this, after the woman fell for the Don, and her fiance was a little miffed at her. :)

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...be quick to listen, slow to speak, slow to anger...
:iconforever-haunted:
lol i was in a baaad place when i wrote it, but i do like how it's set out
thankyou very much =)

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deviant: procrastinator
photographer and writer, amongst other things

i gave up long ago. painted love with crimson flow. ran out of blood and hope. so i paint you no more
:icontuishimi:
You seem too bubbly to stay down. :)

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...be quick to listen, slow to speak, slow to anger...
:iconforever-haunted:
i am now =D learnt to be happy all the time so life is just wonderful =D
lol i read stuff like this and get confused because i never stop smiling now =)

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deviant: procrastinator
photographer and writer, amongst other things

i gave up long ago. painted love with crimson flow. ran out of blood and hope. so i paint you no more
:icontuishimi:
:lol:

--
...be quick to listen, slow to speak, slow to anger...

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